By the sea she went, dreaming of home. Wishing to be there. Far, far away.
She cannot. Her kids want her near.
She loves them still.
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© 2010 Jimmiehov
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Picture of Peugeot Sound, Washington, from Susan's blog, Stony River
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Check over at Susan's blog, Stony River, for more microfiction Monday! They should read quickly because our requirement is 140 characters or less.You might like to try this. It's fast, easy, and fun.
Very well done.
ReplyDeleteHave a terrific day. Big hug. :)
A tug of emotion here.
ReplyDeleteI like this one very much. The anti-Anabel Lee.
ReplyDeleteNicely done Jim, a Mother's Love. Someday she may get her wish.
ReplyDeleteHmmm...Her kids make her stay at the sea where they are, or stay at the sea where they are not? I'm hoping it's stay at the sea where her kids are. My kids being 500 miles away from me makes me sad. Good story.
ReplyDeleteNice, Jim. I bet she's a good mom. :)
ReplyDeleteThose kids!!!! Very nice :O)
ReplyDeleteVery hard for a mom to ever really stop being a mom. This was very touching.
ReplyDeleteMine is up.
PG
Homesick -- what a sad thing to be, but if she were on the other side of the sea, she would be pining for the loved ones left behind.
ReplyDeleteYes she is pushed and pulled each day isn't she??
ReplyDeleteA mother's love...
What a sweet MFM
Thanks Jim
Moonie smiles
That is a clever take on the picture. Better to stay near her family, I think. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteHave a great week x
oh,a poignant story in less than 140 char and it is beautiful!
ReplyDeletexoxo,
Fickle
(My first time to do Microfiction and it's FUN!)
Poignant..
ReplyDeleteThis is a poignant one.
ReplyDeleteAs a mother, I relate to her emotions. Nice take on this!
ReplyDeleteYes, I've had that feeling of wanting to leave them behind before. Good thing I love them!
ReplyDeleteI could feel her long...
ReplyDeleteWell done, Jim!
Have you a blessed week!
hugs
shakira
torn... touching loyalty! nice Jim!
ReplyDeletekids r much important. good one!
ReplyDeleteNicely done. The mood suits the picture perfectly.
ReplyDeleteOh, now it's a sweet story of a loved mother. I like it much better, Jim! Thanks for making it less ambiguous.
ReplyDeleteLOL...The word verification is angsts.
Wistful. I like. :)
ReplyDeleteThe things we give up for our children. Sigh, lovely.
ReplyDeleteAh, the pull of the sea...My 140 Hope your week goes well
ReplyDeleteNice emotion conveyed :)
ReplyDeleteHi Jim,
ReplyDeleteDidn't know you're active in here...:)
A very nice blog, I will come back soon..and read your old beautiful posts!
Good morning!
Btw, I have never done microfiction yet...I may try soon! Quite challenging as I can see it! :)
Ah, I like the sweetness of this one!
ReplyDeleteOhh--what we won't do for our children...I can only hope that her sacrifice is worth it in the end.
ReplyDeleteCheers!
Isn't she really home now? Wonderful, sad, story.
ReplyDeleteThis is a conundrum for many a person.
ReplyDeleteHaving read all of this...the most glaring thing I noticed was your intention to start a pie chart about who cleans the stove.
ReplyDeleteI wouldn't do that.
Your story is very intriguing. The things mothers give up for their children.
ReplyDeleteIt's an awful thing to have a heart torn in two -- I love how you captured it.
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