Monday, September 27, 2010

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By the sea she went, dreaming of home. Wishing to be there. Far, far away.

She cannot. Her kids want her near.

She loves them still.


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Picture of Peugeot Sound, Washington, from Susan's blog, Stony River
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# posted by Jim : 9/27/2010 12:03:00 AM
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Very well done.

Have a terrific day. Big hug. :)
# posted by Blogger Sandee : Sun Sep 26, 03:50:00 PM 2010
 
A tug of emotion here.
# posted by Blogger anthonynorth : Sun Sep 26, 04:13:00 PM 2010
 
I like this one very much. The anti-Anabel Lee.
# posted by Blogger Doug The Una : Sun Sep 26, 04:38:00 PM 2010
 
Nicely done Jim, a Mother's Love. Someday she may get her wish.
# posted by Blogger Bill ~ {The Old Fart} : Sun Sep 26, 04:50:00 PM 2010
 
Hmmm...Her kids make her stay at the sea where they are, or stay at the sea where they are not? I'm hoping it's stay at the sea where her kids are. My kids being 500 miles away from me makes me sad. Good story.
# posted by Blogger Pat : Sun Sep 26, 05:04:00 PM 2010
 
Nice, Jim. I bet she's a good mom. :)
# posted by Blogger EG CameraGirl : Sun Sep 26, 05:23:00 PM 2010
 
Those kids!!!! Very nice :O)
# posted by Blogger Diane : Sun Sep 26, 05:29:00 PM 2010
 
Very hard for a mom to ever really stop being a mom. This was very touching.

Mine is up.

PG
# posted by Blogger One Prayer Girl : Sun Sep 26, 07:57:00 PM 2010
 
Homesick -- what a sad thing to be, but if she were on the other side of the sea, she would be pining for the loved ones left behind.
# posted by Anonymous quilly : Sun Sep 26, 08:29:00 PM 2010
 
Yes she is pushed and pulled each day isn't she??
A mother's love...

What a sweet MFM

Thanks Jim

Moonie smiles
# posted by Blogger moondustwriter : Sun Sep 26, 10:54:00 PM 2010
 
That is a clever take on the picture. Better to stay near her family, I think. Loved it.

Have a great week x
# posted by Blogger Ellie Garratt : Mon Sep 27, 01:46:00 AM 2010
 
oh,a poignant story in less than 140 char and it is beautiful!


xoxo,
Fickle

(My first time to do Microfiction and it's FUN!)
# posted by Blogger Megan, Life Revamped : Mon Sep 27, 02:17:00 AM 2010
 
Poignant..
# posted by Blogger Jinksy : Mon Sep 27, 02:20:00 AM 2010
 
This is a poignant one.
# posted by Blogger Deborah : Mon Sep 27, 03:29:00 AM 2010
 
As a mother, I relate to her emotions. Nice take on this!
# posted by Blogger Lisa Ricard Claro : Mon Sep 27, 05:45:00 AM 2010
 
Yes, I've had that feeling of wanting to leave them behind before. Good thing I love them!
# posted by Blogger SouthLakesMom : Mon Sep 27, 05:47:00 AM 2010
 
I could feel her long...
Well done, Jim!

Have you a blessed week!

hugs
shakira
# posted by Blogger Unknown : Mon Sep 27, 07:44:00 AM 2010
 
torn... touching loyalty! nice Jim!
# posted by Blogger Scott M. Frey : Mon Sep 27, 08:19:00 AM 2010
 
kids r much important. good one!
# posted by Blogger Priyanka Bhowmick : Mon Sep 27, 09:22:00 AM 2010
 
Nicely done. The mood suits the picture perfectly.
# posted by Blogger Maude Lynn : Mon Sep 27, 10:19:00 AM 2010
 
Oh, now it's a sweet story of a loved mother. I like it much better, Jim! Thanks for making it less ambiguous.

LOL...The word verification is angsts.
# posted by Blogger Pat : Mon Sep 27, 10:50:00 AM 2010
 
Wistful. I like. :)
# posted by Blogger David : Mon Sep 27, 12:04:00 PM 2010
 
The things we give up for our children. Sigh, lovely.
# posted by Blogger Mama Badger : Mon Sep 27, 01:26:00 PM 2010
 
Ah, the pull of the sea...My 140 Hope your week goes well
# posted by Blogger John (@bookdreamer) : Mon Sep 27, 02:55:00 PM 2010
 
Nice emotion conveyed :)
# posted by Blogger septembermom : Mon Sep 27, 03:13:00 PM 2010
 
Hi Jim,

Didn't know you're active in here...:)

A very nice blog, I will come back soon..and read your old beautiful posts!

Good morning!

Btw, I have never done microfiction yet...I may try soon! Quite challenging as I can see it! :)
# posted by Blogger Amity : Mon Sep 27, 03:58:00 PM 2010
 
Ah, I like the sweetness of this one!
# posted by Blogger hope : Mon Sep 27, 05:18:00 PM 2010
 
Ohh--what we won't do for our children...I can only hope that her sacrifice is worth it in the end.
Cheers!
# posted by Anonymous Anonymous : Mon Sep 27, 07:23:00 PM 2010
 
Isn't she really home now? Wonderful, sad, story.
# posted by Anonymous Anonymous : Tue Sep 28, 01:18:00 AM 2010
 
This is a conundrum for many a person.
# posted by Blogger jabblog : Tue Sep 28, 06:27:00 AM 2010
 
Having read all of this...the most glaring thing I noticed was your intention to start a pie chart about who cleans the stove.
I wouldn't do that.
# posted by Blogger Cliff : Tue Sep 28, 06:33:00 AM 2010
 
Your story is very intriguing. The things mothers give up for their children.
# posted by Blogger Nessa : Wed Sep 29, 12:50:00 PM 2010
 
It's an awful thing to have a heart torn in two -- I love how you captured it.
# posted by Blogger Susan at Stony River : Fri Oct 01, 06:34:00 PM 2010
 

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